Formal Writing #3
El Ambiente
En San Diego, está contaminación en los playas y están contaminados de los pescados (Fuente 1). En Florida, el problema es el abusote energía (Fuente 1). Tristemente, está muchos problemas en todas comunidades. En mi comunidad nosotros abusos el energía también. Nosotros seriamos usar la transportación pública. ¡Pero, No! Cada persona en California manejar sus propio coche. Este use domesiado gasolina. Seriamos usar el autobús, el tren, o bicicletas. Entonces, salvaríamos un recurso muy esfumarse y salvaríamos el medio ambiente.
3 comments:
Name:
Magen
Date:
10-10-07
Assignment:
El Ambiente
Before writing, I think of what I know about the topic. I make a list of ideas, words, and phrases I might use.
no
I organize my thoughts and ideas so that I can focus on one central idea.
no
I choose ideas and examples that are appropriate for this culture.
yes
I make sure the writing has a definite beginning, middle, and end.
no
I try to make my writing interesting.
yes
I write a first draft and then I reread and revise.
no
I check to make sure that my writing makes sense.
yes
I make sure the sentences relate to each other.
yes
I use familiar language structures so I know I am writing correctly.
yes
If I do not know a word, I use a word or phrase I do know.
yes
I make sure punctuation is correct according to the rules in this language.
yes
I check my spelling.
yes
I check my use of verb tenses (present, past, future, etc.).
yes
I check my use of gender and agreements (masculine, feminine, neuter).
yes
I ask someone who knows the language (classmate) to read my writing and give me feedback.
no
I make sure the final copy is legible (handwritten or typed).
yes
What I think I did very well on in this assignment:
I think that i wrote and used examples well.
What I think I need to focus/improve on next time:
Next time i need to improve on using more detail and making sure all of my sentences complement each other and make sense.
Writing Rubric: Peer-Assessment
Student Writer:
Magen
Student Reviewer:
Christine
Assignment:
Formal Writing #3
Date:
7 December 2007
The assignment is legible (written neatly or typed).
5
The central theme of the writing is clear.
5
The writing has a definite beginning, middle, and end.
4
The assignment is interesting to read.
5
There are enough details and examples to make the ideas understandable.
5
The sentences relate to each other.
3
The ideas are appropriate for the culture.
5
The sentence structures are overall correct and understandable.
4
The writer uses punctuation correctly.
5
The writer has checked spelling so that spelling is overall correct.
5
The writer uses verb tenses correctly.
3
The writer uses correct subject/verb agreements.
4
The writer uses gender agreements correctly.
5
What I really liked about this assignment:
I liked how you talked about your own community.
I have the following questions about your assignment:
Some suggestions for next time:
Next time you should check your verb tenses and make sure that you include transitions between fuentes.
Student Writer:
Magen
Student Reviewer:
Laura
Assignment:
Formal Writing 3
Date:
121707
The assignment is legible (written neatly or typed).
5
The central theme of the writing is clear.
5
The writing has a definite beginning, middle, and end.
5
The assignment is interesting to read.
5
There are enough details and examples to make the ideas understandable.
4
The sentences relate to each other.
5
The ideas are appropriate for the culture.
5
The sentence structures are overall correct and understandable.
5
The writer uses punctuation correctly.
5
The writer has checked spelling so that spelling is overall correct.
5
The writer uses verb tenses correctly.
5
The writer uses correct subject/verb agreements.
5
The writer uses gender agreements correctly.
5
What I really liked about this assignment:
everything!!!!!!!!!
I have the following questions about your assignment:
nothing it was well written
Some suggestions for next time:
longer
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